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If you chose it to rain you could have made the work more realistic as it would allow you to show the reason why the phoenix is a little dull as the rain would dampen its fire. To me it seems as though the right wing has lost its flame and looks a little cold as the right wing has blue/gray where it is not needed. I understand that it is used to create depth and size, but I think you may have used a bit too much grey/dark blue.
I like how you made the embers. Not invisible and not drawing your eye away from the focus. It rather builds on the fact that the phoenix is really made of fire. although the wing to embers could do with a bit more work as it looks a bit like you drew the embers over the feathers rather than flowing off them. perhaps making the feathers more warm and making the embers flake off rather than peel off and allowing the entire of the primary feathers a more orangy colour rather than red.
Other than these points I really like how you made the tail, rather than making it one large pile of feathers you split it to make it more attractive and easier on the eyes.
The lifelikeness of the phoenix is excellent and i congratulate you on the detail of the picture. although some work to the background and a little more warmth to the picture, it is a stunning piece of work,
The details on the feathers are super nice, especially on the chest. That's my favorite part about this piece: it's very textured and very detailed. I will comment that the right wing seems less detailed than the left, or it maybe was a little bit over-glowed.
This may have been due to stronger glow on the right wing as well- I feel a LITTLE bit more warmth on the left wing would have been welcome, just to be a tad more consistent, and to improve the lighting. (Not too much more: i get a feel of left-to-right/near-to-far bright-to-dark for the piece, so you obviously wouldn't want to remove that.)
The flecks of fire are very varied for just being ember and ashes, which I like a lot as well: it keeps things moving without drawing the eye away from what's important.
I can't find any fault with the motion: it's got a solid direction and is supported by the colors and contrast, and for the anatomy, I'm not sure how phoenixes are specifically shaped but the only thing I can say is I think her legs may be a tad short. This is relatively minor, however.
It's hard to find a lot of things wrong with this piece so I'm not going to make up issues. There is some stuff that could have been done differently, just to get a different effect: as is, Philomena contrasts well with the background and pops out, but the image feels very cool against the blue. Dabbling less into the greens and more into the pinks and violets for the background may have made the piece stand out with warmth, suiting for a firebird, which might have been a neat route to take. (Again this is just a suggestion, something I just think might've been cool as well, and doesn't really have an impact on the piece.)
Overall, lovely work.
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